Show, Don’t tell Sentence 1,2,3

  • “The boy was sad”
  • His thought in havoc once crying then angry, emotion clouds his judgement, His normal bright wide teeth showing smile turns into a blanks face of nothing, the emotion slowly fading away into the background feeling a sense of nothing. Sobs spilling out of their mouth while tears streaming down their face like a waterfall. His breath quickened rapidly, his hands clenched in a tight fist. His body shaking uncontrollably with no thought of stopping. “
  • “The dog wanted to go for a walk”
  • I sit there waiting and watching with my rope like contraption that I always seem to walk with within my grimy mouth. It blue with two metal things at the end I have no idea why. I speak my words trying to make them understand I WANT A WALK. My tails shake uncontrollably due to the excitement of freedom, at last, being so close. The creak of the door, the rustle of a jacket, those sounds mean we are going out. My body shakes from side to side my tail swings around missing my face by centimetres. Finally, we are out the door, the boot to the car opens and I jump into its wide mouth, rewarded with treats. The car moves it’s like walking on a boat deck. The car comes to a halt, and I wait patiently at the mouth that opens. Freedom, at last, the smell of the fresh air brings me happiness. By Felica
  • “The temperature fell the ice reflected the sun”
  • Every year around July my beautiful body filled with a clear liquid gets frozen. I am the home to scaly fish and to plant no one has ever heard of before. By the end of winter, scratches scar my beautiful body from kids skating over my, I love to watch them have the time of their life.

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